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It is summer in the territory of the Coastal Shores Pack. Usually in this season, prey is plentiful, the territory is granted several days of rare sunshine and heat, and the wolves are managing well. However, it can also bring the threat of rejuvenated predators such as bears.
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Post by Nerico Wed Aug 29, 2012 9:47 am

Here is a short piece of description I wrote. It's not much, but I could turn it into a story, or just have feedback! Thanks!

As I tread through the ashes of my world, I try to block the remains from entering my breath. It's not what I breathe in that troubles me... It's who. All to no avail. Above, the still clouds break open, pouring their souls onto a forgotten landscape. The rain burns against my skin, but it somewhere in this bemused tangle that is my mind, it doesn't register. I know that I am fated to this: To walk among the long since passed destruction until I join it...

As I tread through the remnants of a forgotten, sodden world, I imagine the ashes swallowing me up forever. I am gone now. I have joined my ancestors in the perpetual void.
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Post by Randen Sun Sep 09, 2012 6:58 pm

Not only is your writing well-detailed and smooth, but the vocabulary makes it all the more pleasing to read. You form a clear picture by using these words, and even personification. It's absolutley brilliant! Although I am dissapointed in one thing...

YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE! <3
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Post by Nerico Mon Sep 10, 2012 10:04 am

Thank you! Your comment was beautiful...
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